The chart below shows the percentage of people born in and outside of Australia living in cities, towns, and rural areas in 1950 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features of the graph and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of people born in and outside of Australia living in cities, towns, and rural areas in 1950 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features of the graph and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the percentage of Australian citizens who were born in and outside of Australia in the
years
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1950 and 2010
that
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who
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preferred to live in cities,
towns
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or rural areas.
Overall
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, the graph shows that in both
years
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does who are
Australians
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Australian
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native and does who
are
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do
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not
preferred
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prefer
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to live in cities over any other option.
Also
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, in 1950 people that were born in Australia and outside of it, were more likely to live in rural areas than in
towns
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.
However
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, that has changed over the
years
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, because in 2010 the percentage of
towns
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and countryside is the same in does who are non-australian
native
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natives
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.
In addition
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, the perception of the people
that
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who
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were born in Australia has
change
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changed
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over the
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, because in 1950 they preferred to live in the countryside over
over
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apply
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towns
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, but in 2010 it is the opposite.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, towns with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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