The chart below shows the number of people employed in five types of work on one region of Australia in 2001 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

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The bar chart illustrates the

amount

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of individuals in five different types of work in one area of Australia from 2001 to 2008.

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, sales showed the greatest number among other trends,

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, the least

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was shown by farming. The numbers are given as the

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of people in

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chart. Looking at the information in more

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, sales indicated the highest

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with around 155,000 and increased slightly showing 165,000 in 2008. Accounting represented approximately 60,000 and showed a slight decline with 55,000 in 2008. Computing and nursing both showed an increase from 60,000 to 75,000(computing) and 60,000 to 65,000(nursing) respectively. Farming had a small decrease from just 25,000 to 20,000 which were the smallest numbers in the graph.

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, the same number(60,000) was shown by computing and nursing in 2001. The highest

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was represented by sales(160,000) and the

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number was indicated by farming (only 20,000) in 2008.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Task Achievement: 9.0

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153 words

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