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The tables below give information about sales of fairtrade-labeled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information about sales of fairtrade-labeled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The tables present details regarding the
sales
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 numbers of certified coffee and bananas in five European nations in the years 1999 and 2004.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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sales
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 increased in the majority of countries, with the UK and Switzerland demonstrating the most significant growth during
this
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 period. For coffee, the UK, which experienced the greatest rise, saw its
sales
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 jump from 1.5
million
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euros
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 in 1999 to 20
million
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euros
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 in 2004.
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, Switzerland, which doubled its figures, increased from 3 to 6
million
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euros
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. Belgium, Denmark, and Sweden showed slight growth, as Denmark and Sweden, which had similar increments of 0.2
million
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euros
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, increased their
sales
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 to 2 and 1
million
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euros
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, respectively. For bananas, Switzerland held the highest
sales
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 figures, rising significantly from 15
million
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euros
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 in 1999 to 47
million
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euros
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 in 2004.
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this
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, the UK, which saw a considerable rise, grew from 1 to 5.5
million
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euros
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.
Similarly
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, Belgium, which started at 0.6
million
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euros
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, increased its
sales
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 to 4
million
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euros
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.
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, Sweden and Denmark,
although
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 they began with higher
sales
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 than some countries, experienced slight declines, as Sweden’s
sales
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 dropped from 1.8 to 1
million
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euros
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, and Denmark’s fell from 2 to 0.9
million
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euros
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "similarly".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, million, euros with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade-labelled
  • sales figures
  • percentage increase/decrease
  • European countries
  • sales volume
  • notable trend
  • exponential growth
  • moderate rise
  • marked decline
  • comparative analysis
  • economic factors
  • consumer preferences
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