The graph below shows information about the kinds of food that teenagers in Australia enjoyed eating. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows information about the kinds of food that teenagers in Australia enjoyed eating. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph showcases the data
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which foods
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more teens in Australia over the two decades (1975-2000).
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, there are
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at least, three kinds of food
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as pizza, fish and chips, and
hamburgers
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which respectively revealed interesting
trend years
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by
years
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. In the first stage, Pizza was not famous enough as a meal in 1975 with under 20 times eaten, yet it continuously increased and eventually became the most chosen menu in 2000. The same trend, with a little distinction, belongs to
hamburgers
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which was lower than other types at the beginning.
Hamburgers
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,
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, grew up gradually
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then
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occupied
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second place
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, the category of fish and chips decreased
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and moved forward a little
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around 1980-1985,
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finally
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shrank back
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until
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last
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years. In conclusion,
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pizza and
hamburgers
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simultaneously increased, fish and chips showed the other way.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hamburgers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • preference
  • frequency
  • trend
  • popularity
  • notably
  • anomaly
  • dominant
  • contrast
  • exhibit
  • proportion
  • category
  • significant
  • rate
  • margin
  • predominant
  • marginally
  • substantial
  • consistent
  • overall
  • variety
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