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School and university students learn lessons far better from their teachers than from other sources, such as the internet and television. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Internet
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television
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 affect college and school
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 far better
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 had
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students
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,
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affect
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 of the
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Television
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 and
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Internet
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the Internet
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 can improve your knowledge ,language and skills in so many ways .
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 found that 75%of
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 and
television
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 have higher grades than
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another student
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. Some
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terrible
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student-teacher
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student
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students
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 teacher lacking empathy being bad role
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 to the
student
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students
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 being unsupportive
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theirs
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 in recent survey found that 80 %of the
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 who smoke took it from their
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a lot
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will assist
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task achievement
Try to provide clearer reasoning and deeper analysis to support your opinion. Explain more precisely how television and the Internet impact students' learning compared to teachers.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph develops a single clear idea. This will make your essay more coherent and easier to follow.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to illustrate your points. Include explanation of how these examples relate to your argument.
task achievement
The essay presents a clear opinion, disagreeing with the statement that students learn better from teachers than other sources.
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You have provided some examples to support your opinion, which helps to make your argument more convincing.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes both an introduction and a conclusion, which are crucial components in essay writing.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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