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Chart and table provide allocation of men and women for the household activities, apart from paid work, in 2008 in the UK

Chart and table provide allocation of men and women for the household activities, apart from paid work, in 2008 in the UK
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The Chart and table give data about the home and leisure activities of males and females out of paid duties, in minutes, in one year in the United Kingdom.
Overall
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,
while
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 social networks took the largest time among spare time activities, sports exercises showed the lowest
numbers
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.
By contrast
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, in household work,
women
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 spent more than
men
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. As the table shows, the highest rate of TV, video and radio was experienced by
men
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 at a bit more than 2 hours, which was the most popular free duty,
while
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 the proportion of
women
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 was at lower than 2 hours.
In contrast
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, sport was the lowest rate compared to other activities at 15 in
men
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 and 11 in
women
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. Regarding reading,
men
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 and
women
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 experienced almost the same
numbers
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 at 18 and 19 respectively. In cooking and washing,
women
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 did twice as much as
men
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, at nearly 80 in
women
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 and 30 in
men
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. In shopping both genders were close in
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 at 28 in
men
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 and 35 in
women
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. Clothes washing and ironing revealed major
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 in
women
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 at 30,
whereas
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men
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 did them only for 10 minutes. As for the repair,
men
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 used more compared to
women
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, at nearly 20 in males and 10 in females.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words numbers, women, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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