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The maps below show the centre of a small town called islip as it is now and plan for its development. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and to make comparisons where relevant to this data

The maps below show the centre of a small town called islip as it is now and plan for its development. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and to make comparisons where relevant to this data
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The maps illustrate an area of a small
town
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 named İslip as it is recently perspective and plan future development. As a general overview,
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Town
Correct article usage
the Town
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 will become a commercial property and facilities will be provided for
visitors
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visitors'
visitor's
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 convenience.
To begin
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 with, recently
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town
Correct article usage
the town
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 has a main road which is surrounded
with
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by
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 shops
in
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on
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 both sides. In
South
Correct article usage
the South
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 of the
map
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map,
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 there are
school
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schools
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 and
park
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parks
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 with
a
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apply
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road access.
However
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, in the future plan road will be removed as it
previous
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previously
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 and will be made a Dual carriageway around the
town
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.
Moreover
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, housing areas are located in the middle of the map but they will expanded for requirements to each part of the area. The North shop stores will be renewed as a bus station and a car park facilities.
In addition
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,
shopping
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the shopping
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 centre will be in the middle of them.
Lastly
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, the area will be avoided by cars and only for pedestrians
walk
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to walk
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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