The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
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The pie charts showcase
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average the cause and effect of the energy usage and the greenhouse gas emissions of Australian household matters
such
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as heating, cooling, lighting, water heating, refrigeration, and other appliances.
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, the most significant amounts people need in their
home
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is not necessarily similar to what extent gas emissions
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created.
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,
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the second chart,
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the largest proportion of gas emissions (32%) is produced by the usage of water heating, in the first chart,
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, it placed in the second term with approximately 30%, after heating machines (42%), and
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followed by other appliances (15%),
refigeration
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refrigeration
refrigerator
(7%), lighting (4%), and cooling (2%).
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, the use of cooling runs in
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.
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in the first
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it occupies in the
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precentages
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percentages
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, cooling remains the lowest stuff in the second
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with about 3%, following lighting (8%),
referigeration
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refrigeration
refrigerator
(14%), heating (15%), other appliances (28%), and water heating (32%).

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 5 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Sustainable practices
  • Energy efficiency
  • Renewable energy
  • Fossil fuels
  • Carbon footprint
  • Eco-friendly appliances
  • Insulation
  • Solar panels
  • Recycling
  • Climate change
  • Kilowatt-hour (kWh)
  • Emissions-intensive
  • Energy audit
  • Smart meters
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