Your sibling has sent you a letter asking for an update on your life. Write a letter to your sibling. In your letter: – Describe what you did for your last birthday. - Went to Montreal to learn sking + explored the cisy and its food – Ask for photos of your sibling’s last holiday - heard that we visited Quebec city, its would be great to see your photos – Talk about something you are looking forward to - Looking forward to meet you on Diwali this year, as party will be at my vacation home in Muskoka.

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Dear Dhruvi, I hope that you are doing well and
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recovered from your leg injury. I am writing in
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response to your letter to provide you update on my life. First and foremost, on my
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birthday, I went to Montreal to learn ice
skeing
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skating
skiing
for a week.
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that, I
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explored the city, its rich culture, food and unforgettable architecture. I can not explain in writing how much I enjoyed
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trip, as not only it was my first solo trip but
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it was filled with many learning opportunities. Now enough of me, I heard that you visited Quebec
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in
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your
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holiday with your boyfriend.
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, I was mad at you once I got
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that you are in a relationship with Ruchin
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you did not inform me about it. But anyways, I would to see your lovely pictures.
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, I am now excited to see you
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Diwali party at our vacation home in Muskoka.
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but not least, do not forget that you need to bring Ruchin with you
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party as I would love to meet him
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. I am looking forward to
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your photos of
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the Quebec
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holidays and
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you
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Diwali
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party. Stay safe and eat healthy. Warm regards, Ruchin Patel
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single, clear idea and follows a logical sequence more consistently.
Coherence and Cohesion
Add a closing statement that wraps the letter up and includes an invitation for future communication.
Task Response
Check minor grammar issues, such as tense consistency and subject-verb agreement, to improve overall fluidity.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter includes a clear greeting and closing, enhancing the personal touch.
Task Achievement
The letter addresses all points in the task prompt, demonstrating a suitable level of detail and understanding.
Task Achievement
The tone of the letter is friendly and conversational, well-suited for a letter to a sibling.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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