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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA Sodium 14% 14% Saturated fat 21% 16% 29% 26% 43% 37% Breakfast Dinner Lunch Snacks Added sugar 42% 16% 23% 19% 20

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA Sodium 14% 14% Saturated fat 21% 16% 29% 26% 43% 37% Breakfast Dinner Lunch Snacks Added sugar 42% 16% 23% 19% 20
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, Saturated fat and added
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 which can have negative side
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 if eaten too much.
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, it can be seen that
Sodium
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 in breakfast is less than Saturated fat and added
sugar
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 by 2%, lunch and dinner
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 increased in
Sodium
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 and added
sugar
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 is higher in snacks. In detail, breakfast is an essential meal full of Saturated fat and added
sugar
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16% but low in
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, lunch has 29% of
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low
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Saturated
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 fat and
sugar
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. Moving on to dinner, it is significantly high in
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half and saturated fat is low by 6% which keeps added
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 low.
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, there was a considerable rise in the
snacks
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sugar
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 which can be
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dangerously
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;
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, it is decreased in both
Sodium
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 and Saturated fat.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, sugar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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