For centuries, important part of education have remained such as reading, writing, maths.With the advent if computers,some people think that computer skill be made as a Fourth skill to be added to the list . To what extend do you agree?

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For a long time , reading, writing and maths

are

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the most important educational

skills

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to learn among other subjects.

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, some

people

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believe that

computer

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skill

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skills

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should

be add

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be added

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to the list as

fourth

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a fourth

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skill

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essay extremely

agree

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with adding

computer

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skills

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, because our

wold

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world

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today fully

debends

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depends

on computers,

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, the person who

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not learn about

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computer

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computers

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will be seen as an un

iliterate

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illiterate

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person. The world nowadays

compeltely

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completely

debends

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depends

computer

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scinces

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science

sciences

. As the rapid

reveloution

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revolution

evolution

of technology, individuals must have extensive knowledge of

computer

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and know how to use it in

proper

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a proper

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way.

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people

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who get the

skill

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of using and coding

coputer's

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coputer

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programes

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programmes

programs

such

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as Powerpoint and

Axcel

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Excel

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most likely would have greater

opportenities

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opportunities

business

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the business

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market and the

potintial

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potential

acceptation

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in vast

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array

fields.

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, many companies in our days seek to have more employees with

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computer's

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experince

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experience

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people

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who do not have

computer

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skills

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would be seen as

ilitrates

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illiterate

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of the importance of computers for the whole world , all

people

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should learn it .

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, others will know them as

people

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with less knowledge, and that

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absolutely

would harm them among their peers.

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, they

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might

lose big chances to get

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high positions and jobs during their

iliteracy

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illiteracy

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of computers because most companies put

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skill

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skills

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an assential

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assential

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essential

requairment

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requirement

to get the job.

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, many

people

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take additional courses in

computer

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skills

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in order to have the eligibility to get the

jobe

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job

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that they dream of. In conclusion, I

strongley

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strongly

agree that

computer

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skills

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are as crucial as the other

primery

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primary

skills

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such

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as reading ,

wrting

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writing

and maths , because

computer

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skill

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big

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a big

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requairment

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requirement

for most

businessess

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businesses

, and the person who

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not learn

computer

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skill

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skills

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will be known as an ignorace.

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Task Response

Your introduction effectively sets up the essay by outlining the topic and stating your position. Make sure to provide a clear and structured response to the task, with an even emphasis on each of the points mentioned.

Coherence and Cohesion

Work on organizing your essay with clear paragraphs and ensure each paragraph contributes to your argument. Use linking words and cohesive devices to guide the reader through your essay more smoothly.

Coherence and Cohesion

Your essay includes a conclusion that effectively summarizes your main ideas and reiterates your position.

Task Response

You address the task directly and express a clear position on the topic of computer skills as a fourth essential educational skill.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

308 words

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For centuries, important part of education have remained such as reading, writing, maths.With the advent if computers,some people think that computer skill be made as a Fourth skill to be added to the list . To what extend do you agree?

Your opinion

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

some people say that it is better to promote healthy lifestyles than spend so much money to treat obese people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In some countries, m any more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?