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The graph below shows the proportions of workers in three different sectors in south korea between 1981 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the proportions of workers in three different sectors in south korea between 1981 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the proportion of female and male workers in three different countries between 1981 and 2011.
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, the chart shows that in 2005 the percentage of male workers in Canada, South Korea and Sweden was 60%, around 75% and almost 80%.
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, in the woman's case, for the same countries was 35%, 32% and 40%.
On the other hand
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, in 2015 in Canada, South Korea and Sweden the percentage of men employees was, 70%, 75% and 70%. And, for
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 employees was
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 the same order for the countries was 54%, 34% and 50%. After taking into account all the details, we can conclude that there
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 been more
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 workers than women in both years.
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, in both genders and
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 there
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 been a variation in amount of employees in every country.

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