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The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (20 mins.)

The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (20 mins.)
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The graph illustrates different sources of
air
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pollutants
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 in the UK from 1990 to 2005.
Firstly
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, there were two sources that experienced a downward
trend
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. Total
Air
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Pollutants
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 started at the highest
point
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 of 7
million
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tons
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 and decreased significantly until in 1999, it reached the number of 4
million
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tons
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.
While
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 it
became
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stabilized
until
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in
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 2002, it dropped and ended up
in
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the
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 lowest
point
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 which was 3
million
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tons
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. The second
source
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 that experienced a fall is Industry, it started at the highest
point
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 of 5.5
million
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tons
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 and dropped in 1993
at
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to
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 3
million
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tons
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, it kept decreasing significantly until reached its lowest
point
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 of 2
million
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tons
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at
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in
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 2005.
Secondly
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, there are two sources that experience a fluctuating
trend
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. The amount of
air
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pollutant
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pollutants
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 from Transport remained fairly constant
in
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at
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 the number 1
million
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 between 1990 and 2005.
Although
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,
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 there was a minor decline
initially
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, the Transport sector was the only
source
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 to show a slight increase around 2000 before stabilizing again.
On the other hand
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,
Household
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Households
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 contributed a relatively small amount of
air
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pollutants
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. It started at 1
million
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tons
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at
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in
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 1990 and decreased steadily, it reached its lowest level and ended at 0.1
million
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tons
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at
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in
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 2005. In conclusion, Total
Air
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Pollutants
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 and Industry experienced a downward
trend
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,
while
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 Transport and Household experienced a fluctuating
trend
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. Total
Air
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Pollutants
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was
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 the largest
source
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 of
air
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pollutants
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 in the UK in 1990 and still remained until 2005.
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While
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, Households emissions remained relatively constant throughout the period, making it
significantly
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a significantly
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 less influential
source
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 of
air
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pollutants
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 than the other categories.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, pollutants, trend, point, million, tons, source with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • air pollutants
  • emissions
  • decrease
  • increase
  • stable
  • fluctuate
  • trend
  • peak
  • drop
  • significant
  • legislation
  • technological advancements
  • comparative analysis
  • contributors
  • households
  • transport
  • industry
  • regulation
  • pattern
  • anomaly
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