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Robot and AI are being developed to replace humans in the workplace. Why is this happening? Do you think this will have a positive or negative impact on society?

#robot #humans #workplace #impact #society
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Computer technologies are growing so fast that now they are going to be used to do
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human jobs in work. In my
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 trend has a deep social reason behind it, and
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different
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 impact depending
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on
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prespective
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perspective
 on it. Applying Artificial
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intelligence
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 of
humans
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 can relate to many reasons,
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, there is one deeply convincing comprehensive answer to it: "post-modernism". In fact, as we live in a postmodern era, whose dominant
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the speed and
technology
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humans
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 have to do
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things faster.
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, we rush to work and shopping, we have to travel more rapidly and so on.
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, to be
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 to
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 era,
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 are convinced to
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utilize
utilise
technology
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 in
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the worklplace
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worklplace
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workplace
, having
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 done more easily and
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quickly
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 with even lower costs. In terms of impact, robots being used
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 can bring short-term consequences,
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 in
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, it will be different. On the one hand, bringing
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technologies
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, requires firing many workers doing the same jobs.
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 to that, there might be some
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inconveniences
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into
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 cooperating with robots, getting
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accustomed
 to working with them for other human workers.
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,
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, in
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 term, when new jobs are created,
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 because of
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technology
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 as many computer engineers and scientists and
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 to working with them,
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 change will bring nothing but ease and comfort for society. In summary, I think the expansion of computer modern
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 is the answer to
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postmodernism.
This
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 new phenomenon will at first be affecting us negatively,
while
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 in the longer time. it counts to be an absolute development.
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task achievement
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language accuracy
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introduction conclusion
The essay has a clear and thoughtful introduction that sets the stage for the discussion.
task achievement
You have successfully identified the key reason for the rise of AI in the workplace, connecting it to societal changes like post-modernism.
task achievement
The essay acknowledges both short-term and long-term impacts, showing insight and balanced perspectives.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • advancements
  • efficiency
  • productivity
  • cost savings
  • labor shortages
  • job displacement
  • unemployment
  • social unrest
  • software development
  • robotics maintenance
  • AI system management
  • hazardous environments
  • economic disparities
  • re-skill
  • monotonous
  • labor-intensive
  • intellectual pursuits
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