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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate at fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. summarize the information and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate at fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. summarize the information and make comparison where relevant.
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bar chart
illustrate
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 the fast
food
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consuming
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consumption
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 by
amarican
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Americans
in
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from
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 2003 until 2013, where the X-axis shows the frequency of eating and
Y-axis
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the Y-axis
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 shows the
precentage
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percentage
 of
people
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.
According to
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 the chart, most
of
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the
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people
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 had
eating
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to eat
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a junk
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junk food
a portion of junk food
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food
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 once a week, and
this
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 increased in 2006 by
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almost
 34% of the
people
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,
where
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whereas
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 in 2013 the percentage of
people
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 decreased to
be
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around 29%.
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, the lowest frequency is Every day eating fast
food
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 because there is not more than 5% of
people
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 in
USA
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the USA
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 are eating
the
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apply
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junk
food
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by
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daily
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a daily
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bases
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basis
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.
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, the second lost frequency is Never as there is no more than 5% of
people
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 are not eating
the
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apply
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fast
food
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 at all. In
conclustion
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conclusion
, most
of
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people
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 who live in
USA
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the USA
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are eating
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eat
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the
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apply
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fast
food
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 once a week or
by
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on
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monthly
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a monthly
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bases
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basis
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 and
these are
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this
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 increased in 2006 and 2013.
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