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The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (20 mins.)

The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (20 mins.)
The line graph illustrates various
sources
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 of
air
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pollutants
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 measured in
million
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tonnes
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 in the UK from 1990-2005.
Sources
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 were transport,industry,household and total
air
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pollutants
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.
Overall
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,It tends to appear that most of the
sources
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 decreased steadily except for transportation; it was slightly lower in 1999. Industry and total
air
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pollutants
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sources
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 were at peak in 1990
by
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with
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 5
million
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tonnes
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 and 7
million
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tonnes
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,after that both of them fluctuated during 1993 and 2002 in order from approximately 5.8
million
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tonnes
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 and 7
million
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tonnes
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 of
air
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 pollution.
On the other hand
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,
air
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pollutants
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 from households and transportation were around a
million
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tonnes
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. After 1963 both line graphs appeared to be opposite,in 2005 households declined till less than 1
million
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tonnes
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 but
on the other
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hand
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 transport grow to around 1
million
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tonnes
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 of
air
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pollutants
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sources, air, pollutants, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • air pollutants
  • emissions
  • decrease
  • increase
  • stable
  • fluctuate
  • trend
  • peak
  • drop
  • significant
  • legislation
  • technological advancements
  • comparative analysis
  • contributors
  • households
  • transport
  • industry
  • regulation
  • pattern
  • anomaly
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