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The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (20 mins.)

The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (20 mins.)
The line graph gives contrasting starting points about
air
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pollutants
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 in the UK between 1990 to 2005.
Overall
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, three
sources
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 of
air
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pollutants
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 decreased (Industry, Total
air
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pollutants
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 and Household),and one became increased (Transport).
While
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 Total
air
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pollutants
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 decreased rapidly and declined the most, Transport
was
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increased
similarly
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 at the beginning. The
sources
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 of
air
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pollutants
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 that decreased in
the
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good way are Industry, Total
air
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pollutants
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 and Household.Total
air
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pollutants
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experience
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experienced
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 the greatest
decreased
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 throughout the period.At first,
its
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it
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 had
air
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pollutants
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about
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of about
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 7
million
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tonnes
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,after decreasing to 3
Million
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tonnes
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,and
then
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 Industry
got
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decreased to 2
Million
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tonnes
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.
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Last
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The last
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of
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apply
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sources
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source
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 of
air
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pollutants
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 that decreased was
Household
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Households
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,in 1990
it's
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it
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 had
air
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pollutants
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about
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of about
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 1
Million
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tonnes
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,
after
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and after
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 that the Households
was
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decreased to zero.Transport
became
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has
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 increased
about
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apply
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air
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pollutants
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.
However
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,
its
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it
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steady
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steadily
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 increased as same as in 1990 at 1
Million
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tonnes
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. In conclusion,the three main
sources
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 of
air
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pollutants
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 decreased.
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,there was only one source of
air
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pollutants
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, but not that much.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, pollutants, sources, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • air pollutants
  • emissions
  • decrease
  • increase
  • stable
  • fluctuate
  • trend
  • peak
  • drop
  • significant
  • legislation
  • technological advancements
  • comparative analysis
  • contributors
  • households
  • transport
  • industry
  • regulation
  • pattern
  • anomaly
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