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The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (20 mins.)

The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (20 mins.)
The line graph illustrates
category
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the categories
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 of
air
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pollutants
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 in the UK between 1990 and 2005.
Overall
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, the four sources of
air
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pollutants
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 experienced different trends in the time period.
While
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 total
air
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pollutants
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 and industry’s
pollutants
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 show a significant decrease, transport made
air
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 pollution remain stable,
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pollutants
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and pollutants
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 from households fell over time. As the graph shows, total
air
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pollutants
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 started at 7
million
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tons
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 in
1990
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1990,
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 followed by
dramatic
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a dramatic
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 decline to around 4
million
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tons
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 in 1999.
Then
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 it stays constant until
if
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it
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fell
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falls
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 to just over 3
million
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tons
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.
Regrading
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Regarding
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 industry’s
pollutants
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just
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, just
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 under 6
million
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tons
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. The figure fell to about 3
million
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tons
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 in 1996.
Then
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its
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it's
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slight
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a slight
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 drop to 2
million
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tons
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 in 2005.
By contrast
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, the
air
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 pollution from transport had a low number and experienced an increase slightly trend in
six
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the
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year
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six-year
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 period.
in
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From
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 1990 to
2005
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2005,
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 it
maintains
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maintained
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 the same level
approximately
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of approximately
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 1
million
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tons
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.
However
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,
household’s
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household
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pollutants
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 in 1990
start
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started
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 around 1
million
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tons
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, but
this
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 number fell to just under 1
million
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tons
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 in 1996.
Then
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 it reduces steadily to just over o
million
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tons
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 in 2005.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, pollutants, million, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • air pollutants
  • emissions
  • decrease
  • increase
  • stable
  • fluctuate
  • trend
  • peak
  • drop
  • significant
  • legislation
  • technological advancements
  • comparative analysis
  • contributors
  • households
  • transport
  • industry
  • regulation
  • pattern
  • anomaly
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