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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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 among the five countries. Meanwhile, banana trading in
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, Switzerland, and Belgium, rose, except Sweden and Denmark in the
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 year. In 1999, Switzerland had the highest income gross from coffee with 3
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euros
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, and rose to 6
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 in 2004.
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the UK, started only with 1.5
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 and rose to 20
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 was the highest amount sold among the five countries.
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, Denmark, Belgium, and Sweden's total
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 remained relatively stable at 2
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euros
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. Looking more at the table, the UK showed a significant increase in the
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 of bananas from 15
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euros
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 in 1999 to 47
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euros
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 in 20004.
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, Belgium's banana
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 rose to 4
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euros
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 from 0.6 in 1999.
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 showed a slight decrease in the trading of bananas with only 1
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euros
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 in 2004.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade-labelled
  • sales figures
  • percentage increase/decrease
  • European countries
  • sales volume
  • notable trend
  • exponential growth
  • moderate rise
  • marked decline
  • comparative analysis
  • economic factors
  • consumer preferences
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