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The bar chart revealed data about the produced coffee in tonnes in four different countries including Brazil, Colombia, Indonesia and Vietnam for from 1990 to 2010 with five and ten years gap.

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The bar chart revealed data about 4 different countries that manufactured caffeine between 1990 and 2010. The very distinguishable patterns of Brazil and Vietnam had witnessed an increase in all the time of the survey, meanwhile, Columbia showed a gradual decrease in the same time.
On the other hand
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, Indonesia experienced production fluctuation in two decades.
To begin
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 with, coffee grown in Brazil and Vietnam were at around 0.7 and 0.1 million tonnes. The figures
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 the two categories had climbed almost triple to 1.9 and 0.3 tons respectively in 2010. The only difference between these was always leading in the chart,
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 the other one had the least production in the survey. Meanwhile, the estimated size of coffee in Columbia was responsible for 0.6 tons in 1990. It ended up the same around Vietnam, which made it the one of least coffee-produced countries in 2010.
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, Indonesia experienced growth from 0.3 to 0.4 tons in 2010 after being flat between 1990-1995. Brazil had demonstrated the most significant contribution to the coffee industry,
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 other countries produced all they might.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that all comparisons made are clear and support your overall analysis of the trends. Try to avoid abrupt or confusing statements and improve paragraph transitions for smoother flow.
task achievement
Use specific data points throughout to support key comparisons and trends, enhancing clarity and task achievement.
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The essay provides a clear description of the overall trends seen in the bar chart, such as Brazil's and Vietnam's production increases, and discusses differences between countries.
coherence cohesion
The essay is structured with clear paragraphs that contribute to an organized response.

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