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Usually students have to study a range of different subjects. Some people believe that learning subjects without being interested in them won’t be beneficial. Do you agree or disagree?

it is argued that in school
students
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 should study
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various kinds of
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,
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 some
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individuals
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 that learning a lot of
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 without getting interested in them would be unimportant.
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disagree
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 with
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 statement. In the future
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 will find the right module to study, and they will be interested in them.
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,
students
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 will go through all the different
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 to explore and to help them decide whether it is a good choice to consider it as a
favorite
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 subject or not.
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, without these different varieties of school modules,
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 will not find what will
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 them in a few years ahead.
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, a recent research found that 90% of
students
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 show a huge improvement
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 choosing the best subject they want, just because of exploring various
subjects
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 during their studies. Knowledge is one of the main crucial factors for
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 question,
students
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 will learn and gain a lot of information from different courses.
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, it will be a bonus for them, by
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 I mean that they will have all the good and essential information to know exactly where they find the interesting course and what they like.
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, if they don't have the ability to these different
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, they will not have the right information and knowledge about what should they choose and they will be distracted forever.
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, when I was a child, I didn't know what the best course for me
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 my school did not give us
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a different kind
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 of
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 as English, mathematics and physics. In conclusion, in
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 I disagree with the fact that learning
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various courses will not help
students
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 to find what they are interested in,
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 there are two reasons for that, which are that in the future they will find their perfect subject and
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 the importance of knowledge about all courses.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay structure is clear with a solid introduction and conclusion, so that's a great start. However, to improve upon coherence and logical structure, each paragraph should start with a clear topic sentence that outlines the main point. Additionally, ensure that each idea smoothly flows into the next to maintain clarity.
Task Response
In terms of task achievement, your essay covers the topic and responds to the prompt. You could strengthen your response by providing a more balanced discussion, possibly considering counterarguments or acknowledging opposing views. This depth can help in presenting a more comprehensive response.
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Try to incorporate more specific examples that are directly relevant to your arguments, enhancing your position further.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your introduction effectively sets the stage for your overall argument, clearly presenting your disagreement with the statement.
Task Response
You have acknowledged the importance of exposure to various subjects in aiding students' future choices accurately, which strengthens your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
The conclusion succinctly summarizes your main points, firmly reinforcing your stance on the issue.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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