The two pie charts below show the percentages of industry sectors' contribution to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show the percentages of industry sectors' contribution to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the
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changes
in the percentage
contribution
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from eight different sources for Turkey's economy in
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two
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different years( 2000 and 2016).
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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agriculture
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the agriculture
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sector had the highest
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in 2000,
while
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in 2016, it was healthcare and education.
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, construction had the least
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in 2000,
whereas
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2016, it was finance, business and others. In terms of agriculture, its
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decreased from almost a quarter (25% in 2000 to 14% in 2016.
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, the figures for
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government
,
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and leisure and hospitality went down by a mere 3 % respectively.
On the other hand
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, in the case of construction, it increased from 3% in the first
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to
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exactly
a tenth in the second
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.
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, the finance and business improved from 5% in 2000 to 8% in 2016. As for
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manufacturing plunged from 8% in the first
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to12% in the second
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. Turning to the trade, utilities and
transportatoin
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transportation
surged from 14% in 2000 to 16% in 2016. When it
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comes
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coms
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comes
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to
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the healthcare
the health care
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healthcare
and education they remain
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constant
costant
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constant
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Vocabulary: Replace the words contribution, year with synonyms.
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