The two pie charts below show the percentages of industry sectors' contribution to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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the pie charts illustrate the changes in contribution to the economy of Turkey in eight different countries in two different years (2000 and 2016).

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argiculture

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agriculture

constituted the main

sector

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of the economy in 2000,

while

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healthcare and education

was

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were

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the major

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sector

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sectors

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in 2016. construction

sector

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was the least in 2000,

whereas

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finance and business were the lowest in 2016. With regard

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apply

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, the contribution of manufacturing in

turkey

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Turkey

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was 8% in 2000

then

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increased by 4%

2016

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in 2016

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Similarly

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, trade ,utilities and transportation were 14% in 2000 after which grew to 16% in 2016.

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, construction made up 3% in 2000 and rose 7% in 2016. Finance and business accounted for a small fraction (5%) in 2000 to 8% in 2016. In

contract

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contrast

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argiculture

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agriculture

was

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apply

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contributed 24% in 2000 which was the largest source of economy,

fell

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and fell

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by 10% in 2016.

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government

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the government

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accounted for 12% in 2000

then

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declined to 9% in 2016.

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, leisure and hospitality made up 17% which

were

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was

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the second contribution

sector

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in 2000 dropped by 3% in 2016. Healthcare and education showed stability and did not change at 17%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "likewise, similarly".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sector with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

186 words

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