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The figure below is a town planning map. Showing the likely position of new shopping centers as well as the various different zones and major transportation route of the town.

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The map illustrates a
town
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 where plans are underway to develop two new shopping
centers
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,
labeled
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as
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Site
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 A and
Site
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 B.
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, the
town
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 is divided into four main zones. At the
center
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, there is a no-traffic business district, which is surrounded by a larger industrial zone and residential areas. Beyond
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, there is an even larger rural zone that covers the outer parts of the
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. In the northwest part of the map,
Site
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 B is located within the rural
area
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 near the residential suburbs.
This
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site
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 lies approximately 15
kilometers
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 from a
neighboring
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town
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 and is accessible via a main road.
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, it is not close to the railway line, which could limit transportation options. Regarding
Site
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 A, it is proposed within the central business district, located in the no-traffic
area
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.
This
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site
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 is close to the railway line, which runs through the
town
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 and connects to another
town
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 located 25
kilometers
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 away.
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, the
area
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 is connected by a main road, making it accessible for residents.
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, the no-traffic policies in
this
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area
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 may create some restrictions. Plus, a main road and a railway line pass through the
town
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, ensuring both sites are relatively accessible for residents and connected to nearby towns.
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Introduction and Conclusion
Consider adding a concluding sentence to summarize the main points or implications of the site locations.
Logical Structure
Work on enhancing the logical flow of ideas between paragraphs.
Complete Response
The response fully describes the site locations and their connections to transportation routes.
Relevant Specific Examples
The essay includes specific details about each location, such as distance and access to main roads.
Supported Main Points
Main points are generally supported with relevant details.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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