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The diagram below showthe coastal village of Seaville in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below showthe coastal village of Seaville in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps provide key information about the coastal village of Seaville in 1980 and 2010. There are a lot of variations but one of the most significant was adding a golf course.
Overall
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, it is clear from the
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 that in 1980, there were miserable locations for different places ,
such
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 as the East Bank.
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, there was a woodland and hotel for visitors
as well as
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 holiday cottages.
According to
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 what is shown, in 2010, they were adding a lot of places and building new things. East Bank remained the same place and for holiday cottage was moved to the right of the
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.
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, they added another hotel in the middle of the
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 and a boat club for visitors to take around the village.
In addition
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, the new place was a golf course in the far south of the
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. Eventually, they
were adding
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 a lot of modifications to make the village more appealing and comfortable.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 5 times.
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