The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years. Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend and offer a solution.
In the
last
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decade
an increase of overweight Add a comma
decade,
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children
portion by 20% in Change noun form
children's
western
society can be noticed. I believe the reason behind Capitalize word
Western
this
phenomenon is a variety of fast Linking Words
foods
and low prices of unhealthy products. That Use synonyms
affect
Correct subject-verb agreement
affects
western
nations with other Capitalize word
Western
health
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problems
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,
and mental Remove the comma
apply
problems
. A solution like increasing the prices of unhealthy Use synonyms
foods
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and
can help Correct word choice
apply
dealing
with Change the verb form
to deal
this
problem.
The diversity of fast Linking Words
food
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options
is a prime cause of obesity Use synonyms
of
Change preposition
in
Correct article usage
the western
western
population. Some brands like Wendy's, Capitalize word
Western
Mcdonalds
, Fix the agreement mistake
McDonald
Correct word choice
and Chick-fill-et
Chick-fill-et
are Correct your spelling
Chick-fil-A
reknowned
giants that include not only burgers and drinksCorrect your spelling
well-known
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
include breakfast menu. For Linking Words
comparision
, in Central Correct your spelling
comparison
Asia
same Add a comma
Asia,
Mcdonalds
menu does not have breakfast Change noun form
Mcdonald's
Mcdonalds'
options
. Low prices of sweets in comparison to healthier Use synonyms
options
is Use synonyms
also
another reason Linking Words
to
the problem. Candies Change preposition
for
is
a great source of easy dopamines Correct subject-verb agreement
are
due to
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amount
of sugars in Correct article usage
the amount
it
, Correct pronoun usage
them
especcially
considering their cheap cost. By buying those sweets to satisfy little Correct your spelling
especially
ones
sweet tooth, parents contribute to their Change noun form
ones'
one's
children
's Use synonyms
drammatic
weight rises. As an example, energy bars with nuts like Sneakers are about 3-4 Correct your spelling
dramatic
canadian
dollars in any grocery Change the capitalization
Canadian
stores
, Fix the agreement mistake
store
while
Kind bars vary Linking Words
fom
4 to 6 Correct your spelling
from
canadian
dollars.
Change the capitalization
Canadian
Direct
effect of Add an article
The direct
A direct
this
tendency Linking Words
are
a higher risk of other Change the verb form
is
phisical
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physical
health
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problems
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to
the nation. After gaining fat mass it Change preposition
in
is
usually becomes harder to walk, do basic tasks, or even Unnecessary verb
apply
breath
. Apart from that, switching to a healthy Replace the word
breathe
realationship
with Correct your spelling
relationship
food
in the future can be harder for Use synonyms
a
Correct the article-noun agreement
children
a child
children
who Use synonyms
is
used to Change the verb form
are
high-calorie
diet.
Add an article
a high-calorie
Nevertheless
, I am convinced that Linking Words
this
problem can be easily eliminated by increasing the price of fast Linking Words
foods
and preservative Use synonyms
foods
and lowering the price of organic Use synonyms
options
. Use synonyms
This
would create an incentive Linking Words
to
Change preposition
for
the
western society and can cause a positive switch in their diet. Correct article usage
apply
For example
,
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To conclude
, diverse fast Linking Words
food
variants and unhealthy sweets cheapnessUse synonyms
causes
a rise in Change the verb form
cause
a
number of overweight Correct article usage
the
children
population in the West side of the globe. Some effects like Use synonyms
phisical
and mental Correct your spelling
physical
health
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problems
can be noticed. Use synonyms
However
, highlighting the affordability of organic Linking Words
food
by lowering its price and making unhealthy products expensive, can direct Use synonyms
western
society to choose Capitalize word
Western
health
over detrimental overeating.Use synonyms
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