In many school and universities, girls tend to choose arts and subjects (eg. languages) and boys choose science subjects (eg. Physics). What do you think are the reasons? Do you think that this tendency should be changed?

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In numerous educational institutes and
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, young
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select fine art and thesis,
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young boys opt for science-related topics,
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as physics. There are several reasons behind
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with, early education is the most important in everyone's life to develop.
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have more creative ideas and new thinking with the range of art and lingo.
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role models have these abilities and that's why
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choose
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of
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interest
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, boys
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more creative in technical skills
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as science and technology.
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, the number of males
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higher in working in various industries rather than females.
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of India report, the proposition of having skills in science and maths
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very low
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as 8% for females
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with males. On the other side, academic
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organisationsplay
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organisations play
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situation for equality
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a career. In
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contemporary era of technology, both sexes have
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chance to select their area of
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interest
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own.
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, different fields have had their role models and it has to be inspirational for boys
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girls
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, the great
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astronaut
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whose name is Sunita Williams,
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with NASA on various projects in
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, Parents' and teachers' attitudes and expectations can significantly influence the subjects children choose. Encouragement and support in non-traditional areas may be lacking.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gender norms
  • Societal expectations
  • Role models
  • Representation
  • Perceived abilities
  • Unconscious bias
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • Humanities
  • Confidence levels
  • Career prospects
  • Parental influence
  • Teacher guidance
  • Stereotypes
  • Encouragement
  • Educational choices
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