In many school and universities, girls tend to choose arts and subjects (eg. languages) and boys choose science subjects (eg. Physics). What do you think are the reasons? Do you think that this tendency should be changed?
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To conclude
, Parents' and teachers' attitudes and expectations can significantly influence the subjects children choose. Encouragement and support in non-traditional areas may be lacking.Linking Words
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