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You have just bought some clothing online and you are not satisfied with your purchase. Write a letter to the company that you bought the cloth from. In your email Give details of the purchase Describe the problem Explain why you need a replacement urgently

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Dear sir, I hope you are doing well. I am writing
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 letter to express my dissatisfaction regarding some product that I
have
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bought from your website a week ago.
Firstly
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, I would like to inform you about the product. I selected one formal shirt as it had good reviews and quality. The shirt is in a blue
colour
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 and in cotton material. I was very excited to see my attire as blue is my favourite
colour
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.
Seondly
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Secondly
, there are
a
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 ample
of
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issues. When I got the product it was in a red
colour
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 and
material
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the material
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 was
also
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 not good.
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, I was very disappointed because I spent a lot of money on that and in return
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I got another
colour
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 and quality. Because of
this
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 issue, I would like to request
a
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 urgent replacement as I need it after one week during my office
presiontation
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presentation
. I look forward to your understanding and your prompt response in
this
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 matter. Yours
faithfuly
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faithfully
, Darsh
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spelling
Avoid minor spelling mistakes such as 'Seondly' instead of 'Secondly'.
structure
Make sure to separate ideas into distinct paragraphs for better coherence.
structure
You have provided a structured response with a clear introduction, body, and closing.
tone
The tone of the letter is appropriate for a formal complaint.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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