If all workers in a company were paid exact same wage regardless of job role there would be much more harmony and cooperation between staff. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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If all employees in a firm were paid
same
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salary regardless of work position there would be much more harmony and collaboration between
workforce
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.
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,
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this
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payment systems will lead to
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in workplaces and provide unfair wages.
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essay will discuss
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sides of
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opinion.
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, there are significant job roles in
company
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the company
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which
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specific skills and
educations
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education
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, these requirements belong university degree.
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, doing some special
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is necessary
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certificates and courses.
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these requirements, many people spend their
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in
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universities
and
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. But, these demands are not essential for
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jobs
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as receptionist and many people can do the
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realty
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must be
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fairly and the best way for it is
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discrepancy.
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, there are many
diffirences
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differences
in job duties. Some positions have several high duties and they impact
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companies,
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directors’ decisions determine
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and directions of companies.
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, some workers play
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role and provide many benefits for firms. Their activity effect significantly status and incomes of businesses.
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concluded by Berlin University demonstrated there are 3 professions that legal entity depends on: lawyer, tax specialist and management.
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some jobs have vital importance and high wages must provide for them. In conclusion,
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same
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wage regardless of job role will lead to
lack
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a lack
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of motivation and conflicts at
workplace
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the workplace
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. Employees may consider
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payment method unfairly and
this
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system can cause feeling unvalued.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that every supporting point directly relates to it. This helps enhance the overall logical structure of your essay.
task achievement
While you have addressed both sides of the topic, try to balance the arguments or provide stronger support for the perspective you eventually take.
task achievement
Work on expressing your ideas more clearly and succinctly. Sometimes using simpler language helps convey your argument more effectively.
task achievement
The essay effectively discusses the potential consequences of a uniform wage system on employee motivation and fairness, which is relevant to the task.
coherence cohesion
Conclusion provides a clear summary of the essay's argument, reinforcing the main points discussed.

Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harmony
  • cohesion
  • financial incentive
  • productivity
  • equity
  • organizational culture
  • highly skilled professionals
  • innovation and competitiveness
  • redistribution of tasks
  • job satisfaction
  • meritocracy
  • contributions and achievements
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