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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

Write a letter to your internet service provider to complain. In the letter: – Describe the problem and why you are unhappy – Arrange for an engineer to visit your home – Request a reduction in your bill

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Dear Sir / Madam,
i
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I
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 am writing to express my dissatisfaction with you regarding your
internet
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 service of BSNL Broadband.
i
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I
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 am Ravinder Panesar, residing in Creighton Avenue, Guelph N1E 0H6. I
have
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have to
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use
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you
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your
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 connection
of
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for
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internet
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from
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apply
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last
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one
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apply
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month,
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however
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however,
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i
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I
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 was
extremly
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extremely
 disappointed
from
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in
with
by
about
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 your services. Since
i
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I
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start
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started
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 your
internet
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 service,
i
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I
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Verb problem
have been
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was really disappoint
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was really disappointed
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 not only because of
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internet
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the internet
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 speed but
also
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 because
of
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apply
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it
does
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has
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 not working properly from
the
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apply
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day one. I
also
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complaint
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complained
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 to your customer care various
time
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times
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 but they have
not
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not to
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give
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given
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 any satisfactory response. they always told
that
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me that
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 they send
to
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it to
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 the engineer, unfortunately not anyone come for
check
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a check
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till
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to
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 date. Meanwhile, please arrange
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for an
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an
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a
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 technical person to check the problem because
i
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I
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 think it is some technical fault. Make sure that the engineer that will come has complete
knowlede
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knowledge
 about their work. So, that he will surely check the fault and solve my problem at your end.
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this
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, because
i
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I
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 have all the proof
in
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on
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record
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the record
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 when
i
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I
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complaint
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complain
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 to you
in
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apply
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the
last
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 month and
also
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 as
i
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I
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 was very
dispoint
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disappoint
 please give me
reduction
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a reduction
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 in my bill. So,
i
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I
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 will pay
it
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for it
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 as
i
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I
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satisfied
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am satisfied
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 with it. Next time if
i satisfy
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I am satisfied
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 with your service,
i
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I
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 will make sure
pay
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to pay
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 the full
amont
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amount
 of
bill
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the bill
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. Please look into
this
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 matter sincerely and
i
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I
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 really
appreiate
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appreciate
if
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it if
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 it could be solved. Thanks and Regards, Ravinder Panesar +1 548 922 0657

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What works well

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single idea per paragraph

You have successfully organized the letter into clear paragraphs, each dealing with a separate idea - problem, engineering visit, and bill reduction.

greeting and closing

The letter includes a proper greeting and closing, which is polite and appropriate for such correspondence.

complete response

You have effectively addressed all the bullet points: describing the problem, requesting an engineer, and seeking a bill reduction.

Improvement Suggestions

2
logical structure

Ensure all sentences are complete and avoid fragments to improve logical structure.

suitable writing tone

Correct minor spelling and grammatical errors to enhance clarity and professionalism.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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