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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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amount
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number
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 of migrant
workers
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 in Australia, New Zealand,
United
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the United
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 Kingdom and
United
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the United
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States
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 in
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the year
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year
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years
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 2006 and 2003
as well as
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amount
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the amount
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 of
employers
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 per 1000 individuals in these nations in 2006.
Overall
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, the United
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states
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States
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 accounted for its higher
number
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 of temporary migrant
workers
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than then
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then
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the
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 other three countries,
while
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 New Zealand has
least
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the least
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number
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 of
employers
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 from other countries. The United
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states
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States
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 had
highest
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the highest
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number
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 of temporary migrant
workers
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( 577,000 ) in 2003 and
this
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number
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rise
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rose
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 in 2006 which
is
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was
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 678,000. Australia and
United
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the United
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 Kingdom had 152,000 and 137,000
workers
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 in 2003,
that
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which
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 rose to 219,000 and 266,000 respectively in 2006.
However
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, New Zealand data only showed 65,000
workers
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 in 2003 and increased to 87,000 in 2006. It was
only
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the only
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 country
allowed
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that allowed
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least
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the least
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number
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 of
employers
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 to work in their country. With regards to remaining data,
Newzealand
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New Zealand
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 holds
maximum
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a maximum
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number
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 (21.1) of temporary migrant
worker
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workers
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 per 1,000 people,
whereas
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 only 2.3
employers
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 did work per 1000 Individuals in
United
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the United
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States
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 in
year
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the year
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 2006.
number
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 of
workers
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 per thousand people in Australia and
Un ited
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United
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 Kingdom was 10.7 and 4.4 respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words workers, states, employers, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • temporary migrant workers
  • trends
  • absolute numbers
  • per 1,000 people
  • growth rate
  • per capita
  • labor markets
  • economies
  • significant
  • imply
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