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Many people think that some individuals are naturally good leaders. Other think that people can learn leadership skills. Discuss both views and give your own opinion?

#people #individuals #leaders #leadership #skills
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 are often divided on whether numerous humans consider that
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people
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 are inherently brilliant leaders.
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 think that individuals can tutor themselves
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leadership skills
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.Both opinions will be analyzed in
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 many proponents argue that some individuals know how to handle
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hectic work and how to control
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people
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 example, the boss of the
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 know how to manage their business
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 employees without learning from others.In
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 are naturally great
leader
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.
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, the advocates of the
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 view counter
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People
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 who typically share
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 point of view usually defend it by arguing that it
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 a unique talent that no one can learn.As
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numerous humans work as
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 but after that they become
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the owner
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 of their own
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 employer but now he is a great master of his business.
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, it is understandable why
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both arguments of those in support of some persons are inherently masters and those in opposition, it can be concluded that
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, it is considered that
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leadership skills can be learned and anyone can be a better leader after having some
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 and knowledge.
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Clarify your ideas more comprehensively in each paragraph to ensure they align clearly with the topic.
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Strengthen your main points by providing more specific examples and details to support your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow between your arguments and examples to enhance overall clarity.
coherence cohesion
Better structure your conclusion to clearly restate your opinion and summarize the main points discussed.
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The essay presents a balanced discussion on both views of the topic, indicating a thoughtful approach.
coherence cohesion
Attempts to conclude with a personal opinion, which shows an understanding of the essay format.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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