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PThe chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change n each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

PThe chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change n each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The bar chart illustrates the amount of one
economy
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economy's
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exports
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 in different categories between 2015 and 2016. The data
also
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 provides the number change in every category of
exports
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 during the year 2016 and
showing
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shows
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 the differences with 2015.
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, in 2015 the export earnings steadily declined in
the
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apply
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values
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value
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 starting
from
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with
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the
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petroleum products scoring the high number and textiles
in
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 the bottom, and in 2016 it's pretty much the same number but even higher in all stuff approximately. In 2015 the petroleum products
exports
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was
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were
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 just above 60
billion
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 and with slightly lower
of
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apply
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the engineered goods, but there's
an
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 clear
different
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 in the games and jewellery with just above 40
billion
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, the agricultural
acheaved
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achieved
 around 30
billlion
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billion
, and the
last
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 export was approximately 25 witch is textile. In 2016 all the values are so close to 2015, the petroleum products
exports
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 and engineered goods were higher than 60.
billion
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, and the games and jewellery
the
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are the
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 only
one
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ones
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 that scored under
than
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that
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 in 2015 but
the
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in the
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 two years were around 40
billion
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, there is a seen increase in
textile
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textiles
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 with just over 30
billion
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words exports, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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