The line grath compares the amount of books borrowed in June, July, August and September in 2014 from four rural libraries, and pie chart illustrates percentage of books, by sort, wich were adopted during that time.

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The graph illustrates the number and gender of books that were

berrowed

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borrowed

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in four

month

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of the year and in four different libraries.

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, the chart shows the libraries West

eaton

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and Church Mount had a progressive increase in

its

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borrows during the four

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Furthermore

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since

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from

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June to

September

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there was a

dreased

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decreased

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the number

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books that Rye Slip gave to its

costumers

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, the percentage of barrows that Sutton Wood had variety every month:

300

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, in June;

aroun

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around

280, in July; 100, In August; and 300, in September.

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, the percentage of the chosen genders was: 10%, Self-Help; 14%, science; 14%, history; 19%, biography; and 43%, fiction. After taking all the details, we can conclude that

library

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that had more books

barrowed

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borrowed

was Rye Slip, and the type of gander that the majority of the people

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to choose was fiction.

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