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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the changes in the quantity of fossil fuel products
manufacturing
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 in
UK
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the UK
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 from 1981 to 2000 in
term
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terms
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 of
energy
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unit
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units
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 which
was
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were
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 defined based on the
energy
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 from one million tonnes of oil.
Overall
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, it is evident that the
energy
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units
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 of
petroleum
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 topped the chart over the entire
period
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.
Besides
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, the
figure
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 for coal witnessed a downswing
whereas
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 natural gas and
petroleum
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 recorded the reverse trend. Looking first at the most produced fuel,
Petroleum
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 commenced at the highest
position
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 numbering roughly 90
energy
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units
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 in 1981 which was almost double that of Coal at 40
units
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. In the first
fifty year
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fifty-year
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 span, the product level of
petroleum
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 fluctuated between 100
units
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 and 140
units
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 before
levelled
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being levelled
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of
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apply
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at over 140
unit
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units
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 in the rest of
entire
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the entire
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period
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. As for the
figure
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of
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for
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 Natural gas,
althought
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although
 it started at the lowest
position
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 in 1981, it grew gradually and surpassed that of coal in 1992 before finishing at 100
units
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 in 2000. Turning to Coal, its production level was the second highest value in 1981. From
which
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this
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 point, the
figure
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 decreased significantly to lower than the level of 40
units
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 before
bounced
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 back to over 60
units
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 in 1986. After which, the
figure
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 fell gradually, finishing at the lowest
position
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 of less than 40
units
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. In
twenty-year
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a twenty-year
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 span, the production levels of natural gas and
petroleum
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 experienced upward trends despite a slight drop in the
figure
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of
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for
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petroleum
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 which remained at the top
position
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 throughout the entire
period
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. Meanwhile, the
figure
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of
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for
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 coal documented a downtrend, finishing at the lowest point
in
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at
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 the end of
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period
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the period
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, units, petroleum, period, figure, position with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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