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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006.

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006.
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The schedule demonstrates the
number
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 of temporary migrant
worker
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workers
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 in Australia, New Zealand ,
United
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the United
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 Kingdom ,and
United
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the United
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 States in 2003 and 2006 and the
number
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 of
workers
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 in these countries in 2006.
Overall
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, in
the
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apply
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2003 and 2006,
United
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the United
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 States was the largest
figures
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figure
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 for
the
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temporary migrant
workers
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 ,
while
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 New Zealand was the lowest
number
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 in the same period.
According to
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US
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the US
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, the
number
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 of people in 2006 was the highest just under 700,000 approximately 678,000 and more than the figure
of
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for
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 humans in 2006 and the average of
workers
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 was 2.3.
Moreover
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, in 2003, New Zealand was the lowest average just
little
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a little
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 70,000
which
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around 65,000 and the
people
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number of people
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 in 2006 was quarter 21.1.
Also
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,
UK
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the UK
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 was the highest 266.000 in 2006. In summary, after
analysis
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 all the data
that
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apply
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provided in the table, we can notice that the information
of
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about
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 the
workers
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 is
chanded
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changed
 in both years in all countries.
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