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the graph below gives information on the number of participants for different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020

the graph below gives information on the number of participants for different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020
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The diagram illustrates how many
people
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joining
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join
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 various
activites
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activities
 at certain social
center
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centers
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 in Melbourne, Australia over a 20-year period.
Overall
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, the film club had the highest
number
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 of participants over the years.
while
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,
bothe
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both
 table tennis and musical
performences
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performances
 experienced an increase in the
number
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 of participants.
In contrast
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,
people
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 lost
intrest
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interest
 in joining amateur dramatics as the
number
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 declined dramatically. To start with,
although
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of participants in
film
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the film
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club
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clubs
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 was the highest with nearly 65
people
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 in 2020,
this
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number
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remain
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remained
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 slightly constant over the years from 2000 to 2020.
However
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, the
number
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 of
people
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 joining
the
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apply
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table tennis elevated dramatically as it exceeded the
number
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 of amateur dramatics in 2010 and reached a maximum
number
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 of approximately 53 in 2020.
Moreover
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, musical
performences
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performances
added
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were added
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 in 2005 as its joining
people
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 experienced a constant increase.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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