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The graph below shows the three different kinds of emission sources (oil / coal / gas) of greenhouse gas in the UK. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the three different kinds of emission sources (oil / coal / gas) of greenhouse gas in the UK. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart
illusrates
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illustrates
 the three emission sources of greenhouse
gas
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 which are oil, coal and
gas
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 in the UK from 1990 to 2010.
Overall
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,
gas
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 was the most
comsumption
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consumption
 source
of
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for
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 individuals but
intially
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initially
gas
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 was the minority emission. Over the time period, oil and coal were
the
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mostly plateaued . From 1990
gas
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 can be seen notably increasing it was up to over 250 and
evetually
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eventually
gas
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 reaching a peak which over 300 million tons.
Other
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 fuel was oil dropped slightly but
1990
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 and 2000 both years
were remain
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 constant
there
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 usage. Begging of
the
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1990 coal was the majority consumptions of people which was
approxiamately
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approximately
 over 300 million tons.
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, gradually declined coal usage from 1995.
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end
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 of
the
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2010 it
was
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dropped 180
millions
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million
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of
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tones
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tonnes
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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