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You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place ina local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter • say what the participants liked about the hotel •explain why they were unhappy about the food • suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in the future.

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Dear Sir I am Gurbakhshish Singh.
Last
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 week I booked your
hotel
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 to give
party
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a party
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 to my
staff
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. After the
party
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party,
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 there was some
feedbacks
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feedback
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 that I got from my
staff
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 members that I want to share with you.
Initially
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, all my
staff
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 like the way of greeting style of your
hotel
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.
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Also
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Also,
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 they like the
hotel
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 very well
such
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 as
decoration
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the decoration
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 and structure of your
hotel
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.
However
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, I got some complaints about the food. Moving
further
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, I came to know that some of the dishes
was
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were
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 not fully cooked and some of
the
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them
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 was not
looking
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look
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 fresh. To add
on
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to
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this
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, Some
staff
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 members told me that the plates that they used to eat were not washed properly. Moving
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, I want to suggest
you
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apply
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that you should look into
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this
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these
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 concerns.
Because everyone
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Everyone
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 who booked your
hotel
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have
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has
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 some kind of expectations and it is very disturbing when any do not get
that
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the
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 kind of services that he or she was expecting.
Your
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Yours
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 faithfully Gurbakhshish Singh 2 Jan 2025
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coherence cohesion
Work on improving the logical structure by ensuring smooth transitions between ideas.
task achievement
Maintain a consistent and formal writing tone throughout the letter.
task achievement
The letter covers all the necessary points requested in the task prompt, showing a clear understanding.
coherence cohesion
The letter maintains a logical flow, addressing positive aspects first then moving to complaints and suggestions.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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