The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress levels amongst professionals in eight groups. Describe the information shown to a university/college lecturer.
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The graphs give information about the correlation between
number
of works and how it Change the article
a number
the number
impact
Change the verb form
impacts
to
stress levels which Change preposition
apply
presented
by 8 Add a missing verb
is presented
differents
Correct your spelling
different
of
professions.
Change preposition
apply
Overall
, the bar chart Linking Words
present
the Change the verb form
presents
work load
from each Correct your spelling
workload
professions
including writers, doctors, chefs, lecturers, lawyers, movie producers, programmers, and Change to a singular noun
profession
busines
men. Meanwhile, the pie chart provides information about the percentage of people who Correct your spelling
business
suffering
from Change the form of the verb
suffer
stress related
illness.
It is obvious that Add a hyphen
stress-related
Business men
Correct your spelling
Businessmen
is
the most occupied people Change the verb form
are
Linking Words
whereas
Correct word choice
who
have
70 working Change the verb form
having
hours
per week, followed by movie producers Use synonyms
which
is 60 Correct pronoun usage
who
hours
per week, Use synonyms
then
followed by 3 different jobs which Linking Words
are have
Change the verb form
have
substantional
working Correct your spelling
substantial
hours
Use synonyms
such
as doctors, writers, and programmers about 50 Linking Words
hours
, 45 Use synonyms
hours
and 40 Use synonyms
hours
respectively. Other professions like lawyers, chefs, and lecturers have minimal working Use synonyms
hours
because Use synonyms
under
the average of the data.
Change preposition
of
However
, when Linking Words
look
at Change the verb form
looking
to
the pie chart, the most people who suffer and Change preposition
apply
having
Wrong verb form
have
experience
tress illnessReplace the word
experienced
is
lecturers about a quarter, followed by movie producers faced 18 % and doctors Correct subject-verb agreement
are
about
15 %. Other Change preposition
at about
job
Change the wording
jobs
are quite
contribute less to mental health above 12 % but the least contribute and probably the most enjoyable is programmers about 5 %.Verb problem
apply
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