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Writing Samples
Band 3

It is not necessary to travel to other places to learn the culture of other people. We can learn just as much from books, films and the internet. Do you agree or disagree?

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 considered that people do not have to visit foreign territories in terms of
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 their
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, since it is more affordable and relevant
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 from books, films and the internet.
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 it is possible to learn
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countries
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culture
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 without even visiting it, since there
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a plenty of different
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internet
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the internet
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, visually seeing the cases from these
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 effective way of
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 our knowledge. Not everyone can afford flights to foreign lands,
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however
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 there are some, who really want to learn about their dream country. Searching for
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information from books or
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internet
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 productive and cheaper method of studying, which is
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 always at hand,
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 flying very often can contradict the budget.
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 seeing the country can provide better
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effects
 of exploring and understanding the
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, as it gives a straight way to practice
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while
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 learning, which any
sources
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 can not secure.
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 exactly seeing the new country, provides
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 period of time not forgetting and losing recently gained
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knowledge
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, since bright emotions and moments connected with them stay in
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 much longer.
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 partially agree that it is possible to learn
other
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about other
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countries
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countries'
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 traditions and
culture
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, using a lot of different nowadays
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 without seeing it,
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 can not say, it is a very effective way of investigating

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coherence cohesion
Work on refining the logical structure of your essay to ensure that your arguments flow more smoothly from one point to the next. Consider using connecting words and phrases to guide the reader through your ideas.
task achievement
Enhance clarity by elaborating on your ideas and providing more specific examples to illustrate your points. This will help in achieving a more comprehensive response to the task.
coherence cohesion
While your introduction and conclusion are present, you might want to strengthen them by clearly stating your position and summarizing your arguments in a more concise manner.
task achievement
You've addressed the task and provided an opinion on whether traveling is necessary to learn about other cultures, which is a critical part of the task achievement.
coherence cohesion
Your essay includes an introduction and a conclusion, framing your discussion well.
task achievement
The idea of comparing virtual learning to actual travel is interesting and relevant to the topic, showing that you are thinking critically about the subject.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural immersion
  • digital access
  • firsthand experience
  • nuanced understanding
  • cultural subtleties
  • cost-effective learning
  • real-time interaction
  • personal growth
  • sensory engagement
  • global interconnectedness
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