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The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewable in the year 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewable in the year 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pic charts depict the
electricity
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 produced in
Germany
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 and
France
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 from non-renewable and renewable sources in the year 2009.
Overall
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, In
Germany
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 major producer of
electricity
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 is produced from Conventional Thermal and In
France
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 it is dominated by Hydroelectric sources which comes under the renewable category. It is evident at a glance that in
Germany
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,
electricity
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in
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 all types was produced with Conventional Thermals, Nuclear and Renewables in different proportions 59.6%, 23% and 17.4% respectively.
Whereas
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, renewable source of power was dominated by Biomass with 39.3% ,
While
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 Solar and Geothermal were least popular in
Germany
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 in 2009. In
France
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, Nuclear power was the main component to generate power.
However
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, Hydroelectric was the significant producer of
electricity
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 in the renewables section covering around 80.5%.
Although
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, it can be observed that Solar and
Gerthermal
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Geothermal
was
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 not the choice of fuel for people either in
France
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nor
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or
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in
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apply
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Germany
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, germany, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • generation
  • renewable sources
  • non-renewable sources
  • fossil fuels
  • nuclear energy
  • output levels
  • break down
  • hydroelectric
  • biomass
  • reliance
  • significant differences
  • unexpected findings
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