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The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (20 mins.)

The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (20 mins.)
The given graphs illustrate the computer
ownership
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 by the population from 2002 to 2010 in
a
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apply
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percentage
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percentages
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, and break down the percentages of 2002 and 2010 by five
education
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 levels. In general, it is obvious that
people
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 gradually increased their
possessions
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possession
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on
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of
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 electronic devices within eight years, from approximately 55% in 2002 to 75% in 2010, and
this
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 trend seemed to rise
up
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apply
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positively in the following years, regardless of
education
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 level. When
an
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apply
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education
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 was considered as a factor of device
ownership
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, the information showed that educational background
related
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was related
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 to possession rates. To
which
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what
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 extent, the
people
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 with higher
education
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 apparently owned computers more than those with lower degrees, both in 2002 and 2010.
For instance
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, in 2002, roughly 17% of the
people
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 who had not held
high
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a high
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 school diploma owned computers,
while
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 other groups
like
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, like
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 high school graduates and
the
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apply
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people
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 who pursued
colleges
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college
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, even incompletely, showed significantly higher rates of
the
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apply
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ownership
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, which were 30% and 53% respectively.
However
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,
proportion of the
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the proportion of
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ownership
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 in the group that qualified with
postgraduate
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a postgraduate
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 slightly inclined
not
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, not
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 more than 7% from the group of Bachelor’s degree in both years, which reflected the insignificant changes when compared to the shifts among the three groups that were not qualified with
Bachelor’s
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a Bachelor’s
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 degree.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words ownership, education, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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