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The pie charts present the percentage of students learning different foreign languages at one British university in 2000 and 2010. Provide relevant comparisons

The pie charts present the percentage of students learning different foreign languages at one British university in 2000 and 2010. Provide relevant comparisons
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The pie charts below depict the percentages of British
students
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 at a university in England who could speak additional languages
besides
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 English, in both 2000 and 2010. The data reveals some interesting trends regarding the evolution of language proficiency among
this
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 student population over time.
Overall
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, it can be seen that learning languages
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has
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becoming
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become
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 more popular over the years. During
this
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 period of time, several significant changes occurred. It is noticeable when looking at «Spanish only» and «Another language». From 2000 to 2010, both of these categories have risen by 5 percent.
Additionally
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, there was a notable decline in the number of
students
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 who reported not speaking any other language, with a decrease of 10
percent
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per cent
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 being recorded over the same decade. There is
also
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 a clear decline in the learning of French by British
students
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. In 2000, 15
percent
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per cent
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 of
students
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 were interested in French,
while
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 in 2010 the number of
students
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 studying French decreased and the percentage became 10.
This
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 shift indicates a change in preferences for second-language acquisition among British
students
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. In the aggregate, it is noticeable that more
students
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 began to study languages, but there are
also
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 decreases mentioned earlier, which gives balance to the diagrams
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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