The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates data about
expenditure
of families Add an article
the expenditure
their
weekly profit in one country Correct word choice
and their
at
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in
Use synonyms
chategory
in 1968 and in 2018.
Correct your spelling
category
Overall
, food Linking Words
is
Wrong verb form
was
leading
Correct article usage
the leading
Use synonyms
chategory
in 1968, Correct your spelling
category
while
leisure Linking Words
become
Wrong verb form
became
highest
average weekly spending option in 2018. Meanwhile, fuel and power is still Correct article usage
the highest
lowest
pay Correct article usage
the lowest
Use synonyms
chategory
in both years.
Correct your spelling
category
Firstly
, Linking Words
the
leisure Correct article usage
apply
is
Wrong verb form
was
top
expenses area in 2018, and it is just above Correct article usage
the top
the
20 Correct article usage
apply
percentage
, Replace the word
per cent
although
it was only Linking Words
hust
below Correct your spelling
just
the
10% in 1968. Correct article usage
apply
Morever
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Moreover
thetransport
is nearly 15% and approximately 10%, in 2018 and 1968 respectively. Correct your spelling
the transport
Additionaly
, the personal goods Correct your spelling
Additionally
decrease
8% to 4% in 2018. Wrong verb form
decreased
However
, the household goods Linking Words
reamin
steady, it is just below 10%.
Correct your spelling
remain
remained
Secondly
, Linking Words
the
clothing and Correct article usage
apply
footware
was 10% in 1968, Correct your spelling
footwear
wherease
it Correct your spelling
whereas
declane
to 5% in 2018. Correct your spelling
decline
declined
In addition
, Linking Words
the
fuel and power were still Correct article usage
apply
lowest
spend weekly income in both years, and they Correct article usage
the lowest
are
6% and 4% in 1968 and 2018 respectively. Wrong verb form
were
Linking Words
Moreover
Add a comma
Moreover,
the
housing Correct article usage
apply
is
Wrong verb form
was
second
highest expenditure in 2018, and it was just 19%. Correct article usage
the second
Finally
, the food was biggest Linking Words
spend
Replace the word
spending
Use synonyms
chategory
in 1968 with 35%, despite it Correct your spelling
category
was fall
to 16% in 2018.Change the verb form
fell
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words chategory with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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