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The graph below shows levels of online shopping by age group for different times of the day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows levels of online shopping by age group for different times of the day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The graph shows online shopping during different
time
Fix the agreement mistake
times
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 of the day in 2015 among different
group
Fix the agreement mistake
groups
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 of age. 60 years and above were active
in
Change preposition
from
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 9am to 12pm. The time from 4pm to 8pm is the golden
hours
Fix the agreement mistake
hour
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 for other groups of age, during
this
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 time the percentage of sales
reaching
Wrong verb form
reaches
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 their peak
35
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of 35
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% and plateauing for a
while
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 of two
hour
Change to a plural noun
hours
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 between 6pm to 8pm among the ages of 25-34.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pm with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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