The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the
propotion
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proportion
of movies published and
its
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corresponding
the
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sales of
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the ticket
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ticket
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tickets
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in four different genres (
drama
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,
comedy
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,
fantasy
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, and
romance
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) in 1996 and 2006.
Overall
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,
drama
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had
consistenly
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consistently
consistency
became the highest in the
number
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of
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film
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produced,
while
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comedy
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was the
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highest in bringing revenues. In 1996,
drama
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film
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became the most produced
film
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with a
number
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of around 26%,
while
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comedy
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had 20% shares. Two
others
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other genres
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genre
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sat on the third and fourth, with
fantasy
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at around 12% and
romance
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at approximately 7%. The numbers were growing in 2006 for the three of the genres, except
romance
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.
Drama
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underwent a significant increase to 35%,
comedy
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at 25%, and
fantasy
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at
slighlty
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slightly
above 15%.
Romance
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genre
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film
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had not experienced a change, with a share still about 7%. In terms of ticket sales in
given
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period,
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romance
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the romance
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genre
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became the only
genre
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that
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a drop in revenue.
Comedy
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became the highest with the
number
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of 20% in 1996, and around 25%
at
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2006,
while
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drama
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became the second with the
number
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of around 16% at first and
then
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had a slight increase to around 17%.
Fantasy
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had experienced a high increase from around 3% to around 8% in the given time,
while
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romance
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dropped from 5% to around 2%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words drama, comedy, fantasy, romance, number, film, genre with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 8 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • depict
  • significant increases/decreases
  • highlighting
  • drawing comparisons
  • discrepancies
  • notable trends
  • unexpected findings
  • anomalies
  • phenomenon
  • emphasizing
  • evolution
  • implications
  • producers
  • distributors
  • audiences
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