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The given pie charts compare statistics for the yearly expenses of 5 different categories by a specific school in the United Kingdom between 1981 and 2001

The given pie charts compare statistics for the yearly expenses of 5 different categories by a specific school in the United Kingdom between 1981 and 2001
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The pie charts illustrate the
anual
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annual
 school spending of 5 different categories in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom in 1981 and 2001.
Overall
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, the most school spending was on the teacher's
salaries
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on
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in
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 both years, despite there
was
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being
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 a little decrease in the percentage.
While
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 the least was on the furniture and
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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 In 1981, the highest percentage
in
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of
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 total school spending was on
teacher's
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teachers'
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salaries
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,
other
Correct word choice
and other
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worker's
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workers'
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salaries
Use synonyms
, 40% and 28%, respectively.
while
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furnitures
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furniture
types of furniture
pieces of furniture
items of furniture
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 and
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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 and
resouces
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resources
such
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 as books
was
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were
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 spent equally 15%. In 1991, despite there
was
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being
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 a slight increase in the most of expenses,
such
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 as resources and
insurances
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insurance
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, but teacher's
salaries
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remain
Wrong verb form
remained
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 the highest. 20%, 3%, 40%, respectively. There is a significant decrease in spending on furniture and
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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 which makes
this
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 category take a step back after it was equal with the resources.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words salaries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage of total expenses
  • allocation of funds
  • expenditure
  • evolved over time
  • yearly expenses
  • educational resources
  • significant shifts
  • categories of expenses
  • proportional changes
  • span of years
  • budget distribution
  • operational costs
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