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The table below shows the proportion of income spent on 4 most common items in the UK in 1998

The table below shows the proportion of income spent on 4 most common items in the UK in 1998
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The table shows the percentage of income spent by
adults
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 and children on four general items in the United Kingdom in 1998.
Overall
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, food and
music
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 were the categories on which the highest proportions of
money
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 were spent.
Conversely
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, videos and electronic equipment received the lowest spending
overall
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. For
adults
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, food was the leading category, with men spending 14%, women 25%, and the total for
adults
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 reaching 39%.
In contrast
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,
music
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 was the most popular item among children, particularly boys and girls. Videos,
on the other hand
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, were the least prioritized, as less
money
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 was allocated to them compared to
music
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. Interestingly,
adults
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 spent the same percentage of
money
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 on electronic equipment and
music
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, but
this
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 pattern was not observed in any other category. Women spent the smallest proportion of
money
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 on electronic equipment,
while
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 children were the highest spenders in
this
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 category.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words adults, music, money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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