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The table below presents the food consumption per a person weekly in European country in 1992, 2002, and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below presents the food consumption per a person weekly in European country in 1992, 2002, and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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illustates
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illustrates
 the food consumption
of
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per
person
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 in five items, namely
vegetables
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,
meat
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, wheat,
bean
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beans
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 and cheese in 1992, 2002 and 2012.
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, there are
majoriy
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majority
 of people
comsumed
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consumed
vegetables
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 in the three years. Cheese was the minority of individuals consumed.
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,
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vegetables
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 and
meat
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 were the most famous food in
europe
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, because
vegetables
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 2220 grams per
person
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 had their meal and
meat
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also
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 considerably increased in 2012. But
initially
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,
meat
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 1148
grames
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grams
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 per
person
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 added to
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the meal
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meal
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meals
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 in 1992 , it was dropped slightly in 2012 which was 1132 grams. Wheat was
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numorous
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numerous
europeans
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 ate . It can be seen increased
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977
grames
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games
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 in 2012. Looking into more detail, bean less
popularity
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 item than other productions.
Espicially
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, 590
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grams
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 per
person
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 consumed in 2012.
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, cheese
was
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lowest rate
amog
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among
 other items. Over the periods,
chesse
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cheese
these
remain
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remained
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 constant
125grams
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at 125grams
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 in 2002 and 2012 both these years.
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 that, over the ten
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chesse
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cheese
 had not famous
in
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the
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european
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European
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 citizens.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words person, vegetables, meat with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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