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The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019

The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019
The bar chart provides key information about how many
hours
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 spent a day by
tourists
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 from China,
US
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the US
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, Turkey and Brazil
practicing
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practising
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 leisure activities
while
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 on vacation in Greece during August 2019. The
unites
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units
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 are measured in the
numbers
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number
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 of
hours
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.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that Chinese
tourists
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 spent the majority of their leisure activities
hours
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in
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apply
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books reading.
In addition
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, Turkish and Brazilian
tourists
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 have approximately similar interests when it comes to dividing
hours
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 of leisure activities
whereas
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, Chinese and American
tourists
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 have that in common.

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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, tourists with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average number
  • leisure activities
  • tourists
  • nationalities
  • cultural trends
  • interests
  • vacation
  • influence
  • participation
  • impact
  • weather
  • events
  • festivals
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