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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The line illustrates the proportion of people living in the cities of four Asian countries between 1970 and 2020, with expectations for 2030 and 2040.
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significantly
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 increase in number is forecast to occur in all areas by 2040, after fluctuations till the current years. The vast majority of Malaysians are predicted to reach the highest level of urban inhabitants
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 the people of Thailand are expected to show the lowest percentage of residents over the time period. The population of Malaysia, which used to
the
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 second highest
in
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the
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rate in 1970,
initially
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 rose in slow increments over the 2 decades span and kept a constant upward trend from 1990 onwards, reaching an almost tripled percentage in 2040
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 the statistics. The Philippines, which had the largest and almost the same percentage of residents as Malaysia, is predicted to reach only half of
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the populations
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populations
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population
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 living in urban areas. Less than a fifth of Thai and Indonesian people used to settle in urban centres and are expected to continue
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 steady growth in numbers, reaching
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approximately 45% and 55% respectively.

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