The graphs below show unemployment rates and average earnings according to level of education. Summarize1 the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show unemployment rates and average earnings according to level of education. Summarize1 the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
bart
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bar
charts provide key information about
unemployment
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the unemployment
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rate associated with the mean of weekly
income
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classified by the educational level.
Overall
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, it is clear from the charts that as you get a higher
degree
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the possibility
to be
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of being
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unemployed
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an unemployed
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person will decrease.
In addition
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, the average
income
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is
positvely
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positively
correlated with the
degree
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level
whereas
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people with low educational
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degree
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degrees
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are negatively correlated with employment opportunities.
According to
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what is shown from the first chart, 5.5% of unemployment
opportunties
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opportunities
are accounted for
high
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by high
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school diploma
graduates
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while
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the rate
shrinked
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shrinks
to
the
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apply
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half for
collage
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college
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graduates
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.
Graduates
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from some colleges
are experiencing
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experience
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4.20
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a 4.20
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% chance of
umeployment
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employment
,
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however
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however,
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graduate
degree
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holders
are facing
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face
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the least unemployment rate which is nearly 1.20% In terms of the weekly
income
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, graduate
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degree
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degrees
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are getting the highest
income
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which is roughly 1500$. In
constrant
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contrast
, the high school diploma people who
recieved
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received
only 600$.
Furthermore
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, college
degree
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holders are getting 1100$,
while
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some college
graduates
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are
taking
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getting
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around 675$.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words income, degree, graduates with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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